About me

I am a satellite.

I wander through time and life on a somewhat set path, flowing through the endless opportunities and situations that come my way. Signals can change my direction, and I end up slowly moving on a different course, heading wherever. However, other satellites know where they’re going and where they want to be. They know what they want to do and where they need to go. I, on the other hand, don’t know what I want to do, where I want to go, or what they want to be. The signals I receive are fuzzy and vague. I follow the flow of wherever life brings me, unknowing of whats to come, no clear signals to guide me. I’m worried if I’ll never find out and continually wander forever, ending up nowhere in the middle of space. Yet, in the back of my head, I have a feeling that I will find my way someday. I just have to keep searching.

“Fly like a butterfly.” – LOOΠΔ – “Butterfly”

Butterfly, one of my favorite songs, is about finding your wings and taking control of your own life, not letting others do it for you or judge you. It shows that courage is something you need to have in order to go against what others are saying and be your own unique self. If you work towards your goal and put in the work, you will be able to end up where you want to be. Spreading your wings and taking a risk, even if you aren’t sure it’s worth it, can sometimes be beneficial in working towards your goal. Even though I don’t know what I want to do in the future at all, this song makes me feel like I have the confidence to take control of my life, even for a little while. The song and music video also show that you should be yourself, regardless of what others say. It encourages listeners to love yourself for who you are and to not let people bring you down for that.  LOOΠΔ, the artist, also showed in a music video teaser that if you love them, you should love yourself as well. They have made quite a few other songs about loving yourself and being who you truly are, which has had a large positive impact on fans and listeners. They’ve influenced me as well, helping me have a more positive mindset about myself and my future. LOOΠΔ has made me hope for the best and helped me love myself.

Butterfly image credit: https://pixabay.com/images/search/butterflies/

Blog header image credit: LOOΠΔ – “Heart Attack” music video – https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=BVVfMFS3mgc

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8 thoughts on “About me

  1. Dear Caitlyn,

    I found your piece very relatable to myself. I feel like I’m a lost soul as well just trying to find herself; going with the flow, letting myself be open to new opportunities that come my way. The description you added, feeling yourself as a satellite definitely added deep insight into who you are, and it really set the mood and tone of your ‘About Me’. I could definitely feel myself intrigued and just mesmerized by the style and tone you chose in the first paragraph. My favorite line in the first paragraph was, “The signals I receive are fuzzy and vague. I follow the flow of wherever life brings me, unknowing of what’s to come, no clear signals to guide me”. This line stuck out to me so much because I could personally feel a connection to it which is about letting life drag you wherever it wants. The example of the song, ‘Butterfly’, was an amazing touch to add to your writing to further develop a reader’s understanding of you!

    I feel like something you can improve on is keeping the tone the same throughout your ‘About Me’. I felt it was a bit choppy once I entered your second paragraph. You had a very smooth, relaxed tone and your style of writing was set in a poetic-description way, but once I started reading the second paragraph, the tone shifted to more of an informational tone. I felt like you stopped talking about yourself but instead the basic human condition connection to the song. I think you could’ve talked a bit more about yourself rather than the overall human condition. This was seen in a lot of the usage of “you should, who you are, where you want to be, etc.” It was just an excessive use of “you” rather than talking about yourself and using “I” more often. Also look for a few grammatical errors.

    Overall this ‘About Me’ was definitely amazing. Again, I’d like to emphasize this piece was something I really connected to for the time I took reading this. I felt myself in outer space based on the description you provided- helped put me into your shoes and view a similar perspective. All it needs is some tone adjustments in the second paragraph and it should be fine!

    Sincerely,
    Faryal S.
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    1. Dear Faryal,

      I understand what you mean when you said it was a little choppy when going in to the second paragraph. Reading it over again, the tone does shift a lot and it throws you off a little. By that time in my writing, I had run out of ideas and didn’t know what to write, haha. I’m glad you liked it, though, and thank you for the feedback!

      Sincerely,
      Caitlyn

  2. Dear, Caitlyn

    This is a very introspective piece and something which anyone can connect to due to how universal the theme is. The symbolism of the butterfly and the satellites really added to the tone of feeling lost and being unsure of which path to take in life. Your writing style is very gentle and flows nicely, and I didn’t notice too many GUMPS.

    An area of growth is tone. The first paragraph is more introspective and reflective while the second paragraph is summarizing the song and it’s theme’s. It was jarring because you were no longer talking about yourself. I would encourage you to write more about yourself and connect it to the song instead of completely changing the tone.

    All in all this was a calming and beautifully reflective piece.

    Sincerely, Reegan

    1. Dear Reegan,

      I’m glad you enjoyed reading it! After reading it back again, I totally get it when you said the tone completely changed. Thanks for the feedback and I’ll be sure to keep the tone the same in future writing.

      Sincerely,
      Cailtyn

  3. Dear Caitlyn,

    I really enjoyed your about me and getting to know you further through your writing! I loved the analogies you made especially with the satellite and the signals coming through fuzzy! My favourite line was “I wander through time and life on a somewhat set path, flowing through the endless opportunities and situations that come my way.” It was an incredibly effective way to immerse the reader into your world right off the bat by setting not only amazing imagery but also an intricate tone.

    One thing I might change is what other people said, just making it flow a bit better as well as add more of you into it. I thoroughly enjoyed the first paragraph since you were describing yourself and it would be great to get more of that.

    Do you think you connect with the butterfly in any other way than the song? I cannot wait to read more of your work in the future!

    Truly,
    Simran C.

    1. Dear Simran,

      I’m glad you enjoyed reading it! I realize now that the flow was a bit choppy and I didn’t describe myself much in the second paragraph. Thank you for the feedback, I’ll be sure to make the flow smoother in future writing.

      Sincerely,
      Caitlyn

  4. Dear Caitlyn,

    I absolutely loved this piece, and the use of symbolism with the butterflies and the satellite really got me engaged in your writing. I felt as if I could relate to your writing on a personal level, and the way you talked about what influences you and what helps you keep a positive mindset fit perfectly into your writing.

    I couldn’t really find many mistakes, except for maybe next time make sure you stay on topic about talking about yourself more.

    Overall, this piece was very calming to read, and it helped me as a reader to get to know you better.

    Sincerely,
    Zuha

    1. Dear Zuha,

      I’m really glad you liked it! When I’m writing in the future, I’ll be sure to stay on topic and make the flow a bit smoother. Thank you for the advice!

      Sincerely,
      Caitlyn

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